Catfishing Comments

Out of all of the essays, I like this one the most. It is informative, well written, and straight to the point. The hook for the essay was perfect and is bound to pull the reader right in immediately. She made me feel like this was a real problem in society when I didn’t really think it was before. However, there are some things that she could fix to make it even better. First, the introduction is a bit lengthy. Some of that information could be put into later paragraphs when more information is needed. Also, there should be more sources cited so that the argument is not so one sided. From what I read, much of the information that was obtained was from MTV which is the production company that produces and airs the show. This could be seen as a bias. Lastly, there should be more to compare in the main body of the essay. Instead of comparing and contrasting, there is just a lot of what the articles are about. This would give the essay more length and would clarify each article even more. Overall, this essay was great and really changed my outlook on the issue.